In the middle of field there was a roofless house. The house had no roof and it was very dark inside. There were weeds that were surrounding the house. There was no paint on the house and there was nothing there besids the crows and the roofless house. The house looked like nobody has ever lived there for a long time. If any one ever did live there it must have been along time ago.
8 comments:
Corey, I liked the sentence that said, "There was no paint on the house and there was nothing there besides crows." Next time, try not to use the same words over and over. You used the word roofless 3 times. It's a great word, but it loses it's effect if you use it to much.
~ Ms. George
what an inteligent story..
steven johansen
i like how you describe what the house does not have
jesse 0
you can put more detell in it but it was good
robert trujillo
Corey I liked your story it was good but next time try not to put roofless that much.
-Dulce~
hey I liked how you put alot about the house that nobody has lived there for a long time
GOOD JOB!!!!!!
***CAROLINA***
need more details
but it was good
-Zach
That's how I would probly describe it.
steven Johansen
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