Thursday, October 25, 2007

THE DARK HOUSE by Zach



The Dark House was dark. The old dark fence was rusty and spooky. The clouds looked like they came from a horror movie. The trees were dark, moldy, and looked like demons. The weeds looked as hands coming out of the ground. The lightening was as close as ever. Bats were falling from the sky. The house looked like some where Dracula would have lived, maybe an old man too. The house was tall, moldy, and spooky. The inside smelled like old men. The top had spikes that looked like they'd kill. That is why it is known as The Dark House.

6 comments:

Senorita Jorge said...

I liked your use of similies. My favorite was that the trees looked like demons. Even though they are not demons, the looked LIKE them.
~ Ms. George

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Anonymous said...

your stoier gots ever thang that you need so we dont thank that you need to add no more

by marvin and iyan

Anonymous said...

the story was good but it was over the top

-chris

Senorita Jorge said...

Marvin, Iyan, & Chris-
What did you like about the story? What made it so good? Next time you need to say specifically what you liked.
~ Ms. George

Anonymous said...

well i think its a very big house, I like big houses. so this one like pretty scray, but its ok. and yeah it sounds like its hunted. so it would be cool to go there for a holloween day.

charityn